The lucky lunch brake (First draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First draft

The lucky lunch break

It was a beautiful day in December walking with my helpful herd across a beautiful lake in Africa.  It has brown and dry grass,  it is also boiling hot over here in Africa,  that is why we are here to get a drink from the lake.  I am so lucky to have a dad that is the leader of the helpful herd Because he always lets me do things first.  So what i’m saying is that my dad let me drink the water from the lake first.  There is only one problem,  whenever I ask my dad to come here another day by myself my dad always says no! I wonder why?.  It was another beautiful day in the wild trying to figure out why does my dad says no! when ever I ask if I could come to this place on my own.  I asked my dad again,  but this time it was my last time asking this question.  I was surprised when my father told me the answer of my question,  and the answer of my question was that he said there might be another animal around here,  but I didn’t believe that because it was all quiet when we all got a drink from the lake.  Until I smelled something suspicious in the corner of the field.  I could feel the ground shaking like there was thunder underneath the ground and tasted the danger coming towards us.  Until I saw something gold no something brown no wait ‘it’s a lion!’ I screamed.  I could hear my dad warning the whole herd move it,  lions! lions! we ran as fast as we could but since i’m little I am slower than everyone in the herd I tried to call my dad but he is too busy running from the ferocious lions.  I was sweating so hard but unfortunately I stopped sweating because I felt Like I got scratched on my back in the river after that they dragged me out of the lake with the lion holding on to me,  I was getting pulled by a crocodile and a three lions I felt like I was a rope with animals using me to play tiger war,  it does pretty hurts when I get pulled by scary animals but you know what,  I think the lions won.  That  actually was boring when the lions won,  when I got pulled by the lions the lions were getting ready for lunch I was really shocked that time because my family came for me I was so happy to have a family.  I felt surprised when I saw and felt joy and felt so lucky because I could of lost my life that time.  So next time I go somewhere if I got one life I have to live it.